Thread: Check my text please!

Originally Posted by Matthew.T

"It was a warm spring day. The 1st of May. Yes, it was the Labor day, the Day of Spring. Every year we have a parade in our city in honor of this day. A lot of organizations take part in this parade".

It was a warm spring day on the first of May. Today was Labor Day; the day of Spring. Every year we have a parade in our city in honor of this day. Many organizations take part in this parade.

Usually when writing, we combine short sentences that are related to each other and create a longer sentence to make the story "sound better" or more pleasant to read.

Can't it be a stylistic feature? One sentence is devided at several ones on purpose.

Originally Posted by Marcus

Can't it be a stylistic feature? One sentence is devided at several ones on purpose.

It is actually a stylistic feature. The Kansas City Star style guide. Ernest Hemingway wrote with this style. Possibly the best advice there is. Write in short simple sentences. "You can't go wrong."

"On the Star," he said, many years later, "you were forced to learn to write a simple declarative sentence. That is useful to anyone." http://grammar.about.com/od/editorsa...Star-Style.htm