Thread: This is correct?

The Force is in your mind, the World is on your hands.

Originally Posted by Scrabus

The Force is in your mind, the World is on your hands.

No.

Firstly, what is "The Force"? Is it a bad translation, or a reference to Star Wars?

Secondly, if you are holding something, then it is in your hands, not on them. If something is on your hands, then it's something undesirable, like paint or dirt, or blood (figuratively).

We want to use this phrase as slogan. For mage academy.

In first i mean mental force, force of your mind. In this case it correctly or how need to say it correctly?

In second case i think yes, "in" right.

Что-то вроде: Сила в вашем разуме, мир в ваших руках.

Смысл посыла: Вы управляете силой мысли, повелеваете миром и(можно добавить) направляете силу(разума) рукой.

Who would help grammatically correctly to make a slogan?

Thank.

Originally Posted by Scrabus

We want to use this phrase as a slogan. For a mage academy.

First of all i mean mental force, the force of your mind. In this case, is it correct_, or what do you need to say it correctly?

In the second case, I think, yes, "in" is right.

Что-то вроде: Сила в вашем разуме, мир в ваших руках.

Смысл посыла: Вы управляете силой мысли, повелеваете миром и(можно добавить) направляете силу(разума) рукой.

Who would help make a grammatically correct slogan?

Thanks.

Well, a slogan isn't necessarily going to be exactly like normal speech, so keep that in mind.

If this is going to be the motto of your academy, I would use something like, "Power in Your Mind -- The World in Your Hands.

Normally, a grammatically correct sentence requires a verb, but a motto can be an exception.

Thanks for the help

Originally Posted by Scrabus

The Force is in your mind, the World is on your hands.

You could also try 'the strength is in your mind...'

But yes, the way you wrote it does make sence.

Originally Posted by Ezri

You could also try 'the strength is in your mind...'

But yes, the way you wrote it does make sence.

That's why i didn't write this variant...
About "force" i wasn't sure :P

You could also say;

The Power is in your mind. The World is in your hands.

It's too pompous to my taste, even for a motto.

Originally Posted by Ramil

It's too pompous to my taste, even for a motto.

Too Pompous! Then what about this?

The dog is on the leash. The doggy bag is in your hand.

Originally Posted by DDT

Originally Posted by Ramil

It's too pompous to my taste, even for a motto.

Too Pompous! Then what about this?

The dog is on the leash. The doggy bag is in your hand.

Much much better

Originally Posted by Ramil

It's too pompous to my taste, even for a motto.

That's what we need!

And the doggy bag is on your stoop, burning. Trick-or-treat!?

Yes, verbs in mottoes make mottoes sound nasty.

I like Matroskin's translation.

And stay away from "the force" in English - otherwise people will think of Star Wars. At least, in the States.