Quote Originally Posted by kwatts59
Quote Originally Posted by TATY
Quote Originally Posted by kwatts59
Quote Originally Posted by Ustas
They were in a kitchen of a big house, an old man and a young slender woman.
An old man and young slender woman were in the kitchen of a big house.
Once again rid a nice poetic sentence of any character.

Your sentence, Kwatts, is a dull neutral sentence. This is a STORY, not a police report.

Ustas, leave it how it is. Hmm, perhaps you needs a semi-colon rather than a comma.
Ustas' sentence does not seem correct. There is no difference in meaning between the two sentences. I cannot see how my sentence is any more duller than Ustas'. Maybe some colorful adjectives can be added.

A rickety old man was standing next to a beautiful elegant young lady in the kitchen of a grand house.
There is no difference in meaning, but there is a difference in tone.

You can't say "more duller" either, it's "more dull", or just "duller".

The inversion of the sentence changes the feel of it. I don't expect you to be able to appreciate this, going on your previous form when it comes to the English language.


http://papyr.com/hypertextbooks/comp1/variety.htm

Here is some information of word order.

"Beautiful elegant young lady". 3 adjectives is a bit of an overload.

Your sentence with adjectives sounds like something a schoolboy would write. Ustas' shows more style.