Hi!
If it's possible
, correct my mistakes in three steps (like
this).
_Step one is
to highlight only grammar mistakes.
_Step two is
to highlight grammar and stylistic mistakes. Step three is
_ to rephrase my sentences in
English in order
that they would be
as though written by a native speaker, if it's possible
.
I'm not sure I exactly understand how to do what you want, but here're my corrections:
As you probably know
, Russia is a very big country.
_It has a
far-reach
ing history full of bright
[better to say "interesting" or "exciting"] events. But let's talk about nowadays
[this is probably too colloquial for your aims, just say "the present day"] _ namely, the presidential elections.
_[not good to say "I think" in an exposition] The fact that the United States and Russia have elections in the same year
gives us a good opportunity to compare
them.
Whe
reas the candidates in the United States are visiting different states during a presidential campaign
, the [it's better to depersonalize in an exposition and use "the" as a specifier as opposed to personal pronouns and omit "here" implying personal connection to a place] _state of affairs in Russia is much different_ [color=red]. If we
_talk about the quantity of candidates in Russia, then everything is fine.
Russia presently has four candidate
s in the presidential race; by name, Medvedev, Zyganov, Zhrininovsky, and another candidate [whose name you should find out!!] Quite frankly I even don't know his name as he has no chance to become a president
--->strike this line, it's far too subjective & sounds a bit hostile.
Of them, who
will be the next president of Russia?
This seems to be the question weighing on everyone's mind, just the same as in the American elections.
If you
_ ask an average person on a street, you
will get a very straight answer
[!!avoid contractions in formal writings!!] _,Dmitry Medvedev.
In my opinion, the probability that he wins is somewhere near 100%.
This might leave the reader asking himself:
Why?
[You need to explain why the presidential candidate is likely to win and point out the corruption/whatever else that is causing it]. Can we change
this somehow?
_ The answer is really simple in my opinion. First
, let's remember how the current president of Russia
became president. On the 31st of December
in the year 2000
, Boris Yeltsin made a declaration
[about what? explain]], saying something like: "People of Russia! I am sorry. I am very tired and I'll go away. You have to pick another president. Good bye!" Quite frankly I don't remember his speech by heart as it contained a lot of smart words.
---> This should be omitted and you should find the actual transcription of his declaration.
[Don't start a sentence with "and," generally] From this moment
on, something incredible started to happen
- I
couldn't believe it!
Vladimir Putin was all over the news and the TV. He was everywhere:
Inside submarines, on a ship, meeting with poor people, flying
to Chechnya as a copilot, appearing with peasants. Vladimir Putin
and... Et cetera, et cetera.
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