Thread: check this out please

Originally Posted by kwatts59

Originally Posted by challenger

First of all, you need a comma in there (and it would be two if "young lady" weren't like a noun of its own). And besides the stylistic aspect of having so many adjectives, it doesn't work. This "rickety" old man ran around the kitchen screaming for thirty minutes??

What about

"An ornery old man was standing ..."
or maybe
"A cantankerous old man was standing ..."

Better than "rickety," but I think it's too simplistic. You don't want to "give away" your characters in the first sentence. And the old man might not even be ornery or cantankerous-we've only read a paragraph so far

Originally Posted by Layne

American girls object to everything men say unless its "I have money".

Now, now, isn't that a bit narrow-minded?

Originally Posted by Layne

American girls object to everything men say unless its "I have money".

What am I to do?

Originally Posted by BlackMage

Originally Posted by Layne

American girls object to everything men say unless its "I have money".

What am I to do?

Well, you said in another post you could get russian brides for free. I assumed you had that situation under control.

Originally Posted by DDL

Originally Posted by Layne

American girls object to everything men say unless its "I have money".

Now, now, isn't that a bit narrow-minded?

I assume then that you are a girl? There are exceptions to everthing.....I before E except after C.....all american girls suck except some of them!

Originally Posted by Layne

Well, you said in another post you could get russian brides for free. I assumed you had that situation under control.

But I don't want a Russian bride. I want an American bride.

Originally Posted by BlackMage

Originally Posted by Layne

Well, you said in another post you could get russian brides for free. I assumed you had that situation under control.

But I don't want a Russian bride. I want an American bride.

Well, she will become American after you marry her

Originally Posted by kalinka_vinnie

Originally Posted by BlackMage

Originally Posted by Layne

Well, you said in another post you could get russian brides for free. I assumed you had that situation under control.

But I don't want a Russian bride. I want an American bride.

Well, she will become American after you marry her

Seven years after...

Originally Posted by Layne

American girls object to everything men say unless its "I have money".

So do russian!

I have money. У меня есть деньги.

Originally Posted by basurero

I have money. У меня есть деньги.

How much? I was just wondering if I could presume on our acquaintanceship to ask if you could lend me $60,000?

Originally Posted by Chuvak

Originally Posted by basurero

I have money. У меня есть деньги.

How much? I was just wondering if I could presume on our acquaintanceship to ask if you could lend me $60,000?

Chuvak
Are you an American girl?

Хмм, где девушки? Я не хочу мужчину.

У меня есть деньги! почему же ни одной американской девушки не старается флиртовать со мной?

Originally Posted by basurero

Хмм, где девушки? Я не хочу мужчину.

У меня есть деньги! почему же ни одной американской девушки не старается флиртовать со мной?

Говоря словами Шнура... "Нууууууууууу, где же вы бл*ди?"

Originally Posted by basurero

Хмм, где девушки? Я не хочу мужчину.

У меня есть деньги! почему же ни одна американская девушка не старается флиртовать со мной?

Американские девушки? Я думал, ты живешь в Новой Зеландии

Originally Posted by BlackMage

Originally Posted by basurero

Хмм, где девушки? Я не хочу мужчину.

У меня есть деньги! почему же ни одной американской девушки не старается флиртовать со мной?

Говоря словами Шнура... "Нууууууууууу, где же вы бл*ди?"

Бл*де* до х*уя, а хорошую найти сложно!!!

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