Thread: Very short short story; please check grammar etc.

Thanks Serge_spb!

I'm from England. There are way more mistakes in there than I thought, mostly simple ones.

Кажется, при попытке найти свои очки под прилавком
My original should have been :
Кажется, при попытке найти её очки под прилавком

So it is permissible to use 'свои' here rather than 'её', even though the girl was only once mentioned in the previous paragraph? That's interesting, I thought that you could only use свой etc when the person has been mentioned in a previous clause. It makes sense though, as its obvious that this is the person being referred to.

шумные птицы not птиц? I thought because they are animate.
молчанне (?) и млекопитающих was supposed to read 'silence, and mammals' I was trying to be clever I suppose...
вверх ногами кот (?) upside down. My cat sleeps like like that.

Thanks for reading that, I'm glad that most of it seems to make sense.

Originally Posted by grafrich

Кажется, при попытке найти свои очки под прилавком
My original should have been :
Кажется, при попытке найти её очки под прилавком



So it is permissible to use 'свои' here rather than 'её', even though the girl was only once mentioned in the previous paragraph? That's interesting, I thought that you could only use свой etc when the person has been mentioned in a previous clause. It makes sense though, as its obvious that this is the person being referred to.

Frankly, it would be easier if you`d put the text directly into the posting area.
I`ve been checking the 2 flie, it goes
"В то время находилась молодая продавшица Алина; в узком месте. (в переплёте?)
Кажется, при попытке найти у неё очки под прилавком, её упитанное туловище застрияло"

"Свой" is a pronoun just like "Я", "Ты", "Мы", "Вы" итд. It stands for "his" or "own" and I don`t think that it needs any previous mentioning \ referrence.
Examples are:

-Она замешкалась при попытке достать свой телефон из сумки.
-Паркуйте свои автомобили в разрешенных местах!
-Без очков я не вижу дальше своего носа.
-2004 Movie called "Свои" (meaning is "Our WW2 allies among betrayers")
https://www.kinopoisk.ru/film/79882/

шумные птицы not птиц? I thought because they are animate.

Птица (single) -птицы (plural)

Шумные птицы (nominative)
but
Шум птиц

I understand about Свой now, thanks. I was a bit confused, it seems.

Шумные птицы (nominative)
but
Шум птиц
yes, of course this is nominative птицы...