Quote Originally Posted by Nuraa View Post
Моя отчаянная попытка перевести Лизавету
Again, here's my edit of your translation -- there were a few small grammar mistakes that I've corrected with red, while the blue text marks my suggested changes to make the English sound more colloquial or poetic (although your translation of these blue parts was completely correct).

You are waiting, Lisaveta, for
A message from your beloved
You can't fall asleep till dawn
Because you miss me
We will fight to victory
And I'll come to you
On a raging black stallion

I will come in the springtime,
I will open the door
I and you, you and I
Together forever.
Don't stand there in the doorway
Full of yearning and worry
I'll be back when
The snow melts

My dear
I'm waiting and dreaming
Smile at me when we see each other
I fought bravely
I just wish I'll stay alive
To marry you
And hug my beloved