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    my translations of an essay and a legend

    Hello everyone,

    Just thought you will be interested in my translations of a beautiful essay and a legend ( both short) from Eng to Rus and back. I would love to have a feedback from you.

    the essay is here:

    http://www.volkovs.com/family/julia/def ... oMyBeloved

    and the legend is here:

    http://www.volkovs.com/family/julia/def ... px?p=panda

    Good luck to all!

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    Nice translation остров невезения !

    I think the only thing I found un-excellent (the rest was quite excellent) was this:

    the corpse of a hit dog with fallen out guts

    it sounds too... russian word orderish.
    let me find the original... here it is:
    труп сбитой собаки с вывалившимися кишками
    yep, that would be the direct translation...

    Maybe this would sound better:
    the corpse of a run-over dog with spilled guts

    A really nice and heart-warming image I am getting here...
    Hei, rett norsken min og du er død.
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    Actually I was reading some more and seeing how you translated it... I came over a question why did you translate:

    А ты встречал меня с доброй, но снисходительно-язвительной улыбкой: "Кого я вижу! Никак Ленаванна вернулись! А чё ж не пожилось на чужбинке-то?"

    to this:

    Each time I returned you met me with a sarcastic smile. “Who do I see? Have you really come back? Couldn’t stay abroad?”

    (I hope you don't mind me asking questions)

    It's a great english sentence (nothing at all wrong with it), but it loses some of the style from the original.

    Each time I returned you met me with a kind, but sarcastic smile: "Who is it I see? It can't be that Lenavanna has returned! Aren't they treating her well enough abroad?"

    I admit the last part is a though cookie, maybe even a though cupcake.
    I don't know if the чужбинке-то is physically abroad or just away from him... heck your translation is simpler and doesn't give me a headache
    Hei, rett norsken min og du er død.
    I am a notourriouse misspeller. Be easy on me.
    Пожалуйста! Исправляйте мои глупые ошибки (но оставьте умные)!
    Yo hablo español mejor que tú.
    Trusnse kal'rt eturule sikay!!! ))

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