Quote Originally Posted by Demonic_Duck View Post
This is what I got, although it doesn't seem to be much more complete or make much more sense than what you have...

Time has up and risen slowly,
Finite ____ and left hand low
Vantage points absurd and holy
Sees our son and all the moon

Sickly sap sun soap sud clouds
Gather hopelessly around,
Darkly darken hear the ____
Traps the air with weightless sound

What if any
Is the answer,
This ________________ spend
So the seeds which spring and dance lit
In the growing round, repent(?)

Give me children or indeed
Nothing will I give to thee
Table gathered, ghosts were breathless
Grasp and feel I'm flowing free

Cross the island to see the corner
Of your lips fall and rise
Sauntering rise and then intone(?)
Though benign and resign?
Flatten and breaking at the break of time
Laughter cures the winter
Roll the bones and eyes of grey
Laughter's end and pass away
A few things I hear differently:

Time has up and risen slowly,
Finally gone and left hand low
Vantage points absurd and holy
Sees her son and all below

Sickly sap sun soap sud clouds
Gather hopelessly around,
Darkly darken hear the hunter
Traps the air with weightless sound

What if any
Is the answer,
For this sin to go unspent
Sow the seeds which spring and dance lit (No real difference between so and sow, but sow seems to make more sense)
In the growing ground, repent

Give me children or indeed
Nothing will I give to thee
Table gathered, ghosts were breathless
Grasp and fail and flow and flee

Mostly I long to see the corner,
Of your lips, fall and rise
Sauntering rise and then in time
Though benign and resign?
If that didn't break-in at the break of tides
Laughter cures the winter
Rolling bones and eyes of grey
Laughter's end and pass away

Not sure about some of them, though.