The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store.
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The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It was drizzling.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It was drizzling. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead.
Barmaley, this topic is only for Russian speakers learning English. Read the disclaimer! :roll: Our job here is to correct their grammar!
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"The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It was drizzling."
ребята, смысль немножко не та. "Утро было облачное когда он закрыл дверь и пошел в книжный магазин по обычнам путям. дождь идет." ? Может быть лучше "The morning was cloudy, he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It started to drizzle"... :?:
That's the problem with doing the disclaimer on a third thread! I didn't read it until AFTER I posted!Quote:
Originally Posted by kalinka_vinnie
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It was drizzling. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered, what today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work.
kalinka_vinnie
i was mistaken i want to say this "It started to drizzle" thx a lot))
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It was drizzling. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered, what today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange think came to his mind
exactly in the book store.
I'm sorry
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It was drizzling. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered, what today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange think came to his mind exactly in the book store.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered, what today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange think came to his mind exactly in the book store. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered, what today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange think came to his mind exactly in the book store. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
Suddenly he remembered, what today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work.
Suggestions for this sentence:
Suddenly he remembered, that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work.
Suddenly he remembered, what today is. It is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work.
Scott
Maybe: Suddenly he remembered, what today was. It was FRIDAYQuote:
Originally Posted by fortheether
Remember that you can write only ONE phrase per turn!
Remember to let two other people write two phrases after you!
Thank you for attantive reading the rules.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the book store. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered, what today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange think came to his mind exactly in the book store. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cryed.
"Suddenly he remembered that it was Friday" - I think that's the way to get this idea across.
OK OK TIME OUT! Let's fix this before going on, allrighty? :)Quote:
Originally Posted by ST
Hehe, doorbells ringing in bookstores?
--- here is the uncolored version:
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind exactly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried.
"Had come to his mind exactly in the bookstore" sounds awkward. Other possible variations that sound better (other than the one above):
"...had come to his mind in the bookstore"
"...had come to his mind right there in the bookstore"
"...had come to his mind upon entering the bookstore"
I dunno, i'm sure the list is endless...
tdk
ok - let's take this one. Please somebody continue.Quote:
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried. His face was wet with tears of joy.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried. His face was wet with tears of joy.
"Where have you been for so many years?" mumbled Dimitry hardly moving his lips.
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried. His face was wet with tears of joy.
"Where have you been for so many years?" mumbled Dimitry hardly moving his lips. Then they both stood silently just watching each other - the father and the son.
Actually, this is not entirely I meant. What I wanted to say in Russian sounds like this: "Он не мог объяснить, почему такая странная идея (мысль) пришла ему в голову именно в книжном магазине." Your sentence is translated like this: "Он не мог объяснить, почему такая странная идея (мысль) пришла ему в голову так внезапно в книжном магазине" It's different.Quote:
Originally Posted by tdk2fe
never mind Kirill! Just wait when somebody add one more phrase and write on. :D
Тогда лучше вот так:Quote:
Originally Posted by Kirill2142
He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind right there in the bookstore.[/quote]
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried. His face was wet with tears of joy.
"Where have you been for so many years?" mumbled Dimitry hardly moving his lips. Then they both stood silently just watching each other - the father and the son.
"Stop, catched!" - shouted the director, "Wonderful! wonderful! You have never played like this before!"
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind exactly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried.
"Stop, catched!" - shouted the director, "Wonderful! wonderful! You have never played like this before!" The film was about a man, that had found treasures, hidden by his father-pirate, and the most interesting thing was that the story had been based on the real events!
Эй! Нецелесообразно включать предложение Бармалея, так как он не русский! И тем более предложение несерьёзно, как об этом говорил Лев! Давайте удалим его. И ещё: посмотрите на текст внимательнее. У вас несогласовка. Вдруг подумал о пятнице и тут же - ещё быстрее! - очутился в книжном. Исправляем ошибку?
Кирилл, кажется, закруглил историю плавно. :)
Почему? Он же был в книжном..и там ему пришла эта идеяQuote:
Originally Posted by Rtyom
По тексту герой собрался в магазин, вышел из дома, вдруг подумал о чём-то. И, как по волшебству, ни с того ни с сего оказывается в пункте назначения и думает далее, что эта мысль ему пришла в магазине? Где тут связь? :? Слово "suddenly" тут получается совершенно не в кассу.Quote:
Originally Posted by flowforever
Давайте писать дальше - а исправим потом. Все продолжаем. Получается очень интересно!
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind exactly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried.
"Stop, catched!" - shouted the director, "Wonderful! wonderful! You have never played like this before!" The film was about a man, that had found treasures, hidden by his father-pirate, and the most interesting thing was that the story had been based on the real events!
Having thought for a few seconds, the director decided to shoot another take: Take 2!
You're right - quite funny :lol: :lol: :lol:Quote:
Originally Posted by Rtyom
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind exactly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried.
"Stop, catched!" - shouted the director, "Wonderful! wonderful! You have never played like this before!" The film was about a man, that had found treasures, hidden by his father-pirate, and the most interesting thing was that the story had been based on the real events!
Having thought for a few seconds, the director decided to shoot another take: Take 2!
"No way!" - Dimitry said in a disappointed tone, - "I shan't say a word before I get my coffee!!"
Stop stop stop We've lost the sentences. Here they are:
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried. His face was wet with tears of joy.
"Where have you been for so many years?" mumbled Dimitry hardly moving his lips. Then they both stood silently just watching each other - the father and the son.
"Stop, catched!" - shouted the director, "Wonderful! wonderful! You have never played like this before!"
The film was about a man, that had found treasures, hidden by his father-pirate, and the most interesting thing was that the story had been based on the real events!
Having thought for a few seconds, the director decided to shoot another take: Take 2!
"No way!" - Dimitry said in a disappointed tone, - "I shan't say a word before I get my coffee!!"
Now go on
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried. His face was wet with tears of joy.
"Where have you been for so many years?" mumbled Dimitry hardly moving his lips. Then they both stood silently just watching each other - the father and the son.
"Stop, catched!" - shouted the director, "Wonderful! wonderful! You have never played like this before!"
The film was about a man, that had found treasures, hidden by his father-pirate, and the most interesting thing was that the story had been based on the real events!
Having thought for a few seconds, the director decided to shoot another take: Take 2!
"No way!" - Dimitry said in a disappointed tone, - "I shan't say a word before I get my coffee!!"
"Alright" - said the director knowing that if he didn't allow Dimitry to have a cup of coffee, Dimitry wouldn't be able to act as well as he had a few minutes before.
Пунктуация в прямой речи в английском не такая. :)
I know! But who cares? :lol:
I do.
stop and continue please with the following:
The morning was cloudy when he locked the door and went by his usual way to the bookstore. It started to drizzle. Unfortunately, "it" wasn't the clouds, but a dog standing on the roof overhead. Suddenly he remembered that today is FRIDAY, and decided to drink some beer after work. He couldn't explain why such a strange thought had come to his mind so suddenly in the bookstore. He stood in the middle of the store, gazing at the shelves when the door bell rang behind his back. He turned round and couldn't believe his eyes. It was his father he hadn't seen for ages!
"Dimitry, my son!"-the old man cried. His face was wet with tears of joy.
"Where have you been for so many years?" mumbled Dimitry hardly moving his lips. Then they both stood silently just watching each other - the father and the son.
"Stop, catched!" - shouted the director, "Wonderful! wonderful! You have never played like this before!"
The film was about a man, that had found treasures, hidden by his father-pirate, and the most interesting thing was that the story had been based on the real events!
Having thought for a few seconds, the director decided to shoot another take: Take 2!
"No way!" - Dimitry said in a disappointed tone, - "I shan't say a word before I get my coffee!!"
"Alright" - said the director knowing that if he didn't allow Dimitry to have a cup of coffee, Dimitry wouldn't be able to act as well as he had a few minutes before.
thank you!