Quote Originally Posted by CoffeeCup View Post
For me it is Ok. Only a dash should be added.
A question about a couple of the corrections you made, CoffeeCup:

Why did you choose a perfective verb in "как по-иному сказать" as opposed to, maybe, govorit'?

Why did you use "Что вы думаете" as opposed to "как вы думаете"?

I just want to understand the reasons for choosing particular forms over others.