Thread: Pls. look over these verses for me.

Thanks, Tania. Another variant might be as follows.

Kak k moryu stremitsya reka,
I v nebo vzletaet dusha,
Tak Tebya lyublyu ya.

How does that sound to your ears? Dusha, I think needs to come at the end of the second line to balance reka and ya in the first and third, and mne nravitsya prostoe nebo after all instead of heaven.

Yes. I think your variant is better.