Quote Originally Posted by pranki
Quote Originally Posted by basurero
Here are a few corrections. Well done
Thank you very much! But why did you write "she spoke Russian"?
You are talking about something that happened in the past so you have to use the past tense "spoke". It is one of those funny things about English. "She spoke Russian" could imply that she doesn't speak Russian now.

Here are a couple of other things.

Quote Originally Posted by pranki
... in our local network
"... on our local network"

Quote Originally Posted by pranki
I decided to discover/find out who she is
I decided to find out who she was.
It is not good to end a sentence with "was" or "is".

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my life would be far more funny
This sounds a bit strange. Maybe "my life would be a lot funnier".

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... he spoke "I'll be back".
"... he said "I'll be back".