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    Rhymes

    Hello.

    I am trying to write rhymes... Here it is:

    ARCTIC
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    There are no people around
    Who can bring any help
    White snow only surrounds
    And the air is very fresh

    UNIVERSE
    ========
    There are stars, planets, galaxies
    And black holes deep in space
    Who knows what was the planes
    When the God's creating this place

    TIME
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    Time always flows steadily
    And we can't change it
    If you're spending time for nothing
    Just stop... And think... A little bit.

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    Why don't you try to write a Limerick?
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    Quote Originally Posted by DDT
    Why don't you try to write a Limerick?
    Sorry for hijacking the thread for a while!
    As for me, I tried to write a couple of them five years ago. It's not that difficult:

    There lives an unusual Man,
    Who never wants to walk as he can;
    All the people who lope
    Look and laugh at the grope
    Of this really obstinate Man!

    An interesting Girl from Brazil
    Suddenly felt she was ill;
    So she made her way home
    With the groggy man’s roam,
    That wonderful Girl from Brazil.

    What do you all think?
    «И всё, что сейчас происходит внутре — тоже является частью вселенной».

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rtyom
    Quote Originally Posted by DDT
    Why don't you try to write a Limerick?
    Sorry for hijacking the thread for a while!
    As for me, I tried to write a couple of them five years ago. It's not that difficult:

    There lives an unusual Man,
    Who never wants to walk as he can;
    All the people who lope
    Look and laugh at the grope
    Of this really obstinate Man!

    An interesting Girl from Brazil
    Suddenly felt she was ill;
    So she made her way home
    With the groggy man’s roam,
    That wonderful Girl from Brazil.

    What do you all think?
    I think you have big vocabulary

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rtyom
    Quote Originally Posted by DDT
    Why don't you try to write a Limerick?
    Sorry for hijacking the thread for a while!
    As for me, I tried to write a couple of them five years ago. It's not that difficult:

    There lives an unusual Man,
    Who never wants to walk as he can;
    All the people who lope
    Look and laugh at the grope
    Of this really obstinate Man!

    An interesting Girl from Brazil
    Suddenly felt she was ill;
    So she made her way home
    With the groggy man’s roam,
    That wonderful Girl from Brazil.

    What do you all think?
    Your syllable count and rhyme placement are fine. Two things though. First, it's usually good not to repeat the same rhyming word. Once in a while this is ok, but you should try to avoid it if you can.

    Second, limericks need to be funny. The majority of limericks are actually really dirty, but any form of humor is fine. The classic example of the dirty limerick is to start like this:

    There once was a man from Nantucket . . .(a city in Massachusetts)
    The second or third rhyme will then be f--- it. I'm not promoting writing variations on that one, but that's been a common limerick for a long time.

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    Quote Originally Posted by paulb
    [First, it's usually good not to repeat the same rhyming word. Once in a while this is ok, but you should try to avoid it if you can.
    In early, classic limericks this repetition was actually a norm. The last line was usually a variation of the first one.

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    Give me a few days Rytom....
    I am going with a visitor to Provincetown, Massachusetts tomorrow...
    Topics; gay resort, Bulgarian "boys", straight Russian girls, and my visitor, well, she's stuck in the Cold War Era... Good limericks


    An aside, Nantucket is a small town on an island of the same name. I was there a few weeks ago.

    Here's a sample:

    A charming young lady from Poland,
    Extended her visa to this land
    She gurgled and thought,
    This is quite a lot
    To get past security Homeland...

    So I'm a perv....
    I'm easily amused late at night...

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    Hmmm,,,,,I've started a limerick but I am stuck for the next word......

    There once was this chick from China
    Who had an expensive ...............

    any ideas?
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    Vagina. This is the word you're searching for.
    Show yourself - destroy our fears - release your mask

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    Thanks for comments. I have to work on that.

    So, please, now it's astronomer's topic again.
    «И всё, что сейчас происходит внутре — тоже является частью вселенной».

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    Quote Originally Posted by VendingMachine
    Vagina. This is the word you're searching for.
    DDT was joking, he knew that
    Well, I don't know what to say. I want to say thanks to the Academy, to Mama, to Papa and to my dog. I love you all.

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    Quote Originally Posted by charlestonian
    Quote Originally Posted by VendingMachine
    Vagina. This is the word you're searching for.
    DDT was joking, he knew that
    VendingMachine knew that I knew too! He just wanted an excuse to type that word. .........He da man!
    Let me be a free man, free to travel, free to stop, free to work, free to trade where I choose, free to choose my own teachers, free to follow the religion of my fathers, free to talk, think and act for myself. - Chief Joseph, Nez Perce

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