Re: Please check my speech.
Hello, ladies and gentlemen!
Did you ask me to give my opinion about cigarettes and smokers? Well, I'll do it.
First of all, I always try to minimize my association with active smokers. Oh, no, I don't have any prejudices and, of course, don't consider smokers ('are' not needed, because of the word 'consider'. If you used the word 'think' then yes, 'are' would be needed) unworthy of my attention. But I take care of my health! Smokers poison the air around them, and other people must put on gas-masks to speak (unless you want to use the more formal sounding "in speaking...with smokers" with smokers. A gas-mask is very uncomfortable garment, isn't it?
Of course, smokers must do their dirty deed in special places marked by signs like "Caution!" or "Toxic air!" (Because they're two seperate signs, you need to put the "" marks around each of them seperately)
And ('the' not needed. "worst of all" is a set phrase) worst of all, (I'm not sure how neccessary this comma is, so someone else may not use one here) is a smoking girl! Imagine you see a very pretty girl. You come to her and say something like "Hello, today is a very nice day", just to meet her. But you don't hear her answer because of a stunning air stream from her mouth! It's terrible! In such a case, even the figure of Aphrodite and the face of Venus wouldn't be able to save the girl!
*"In that case" is a set phrase which means similar to "if that's true, then..." The concept of 'if' being important.
eg
"Her breath is bad."
"In that case, I'm not going to speak with her."
(If that's the case, I'm not going to talk to her)
Smoking is such a terribly (I assume you do realize that this is a very strong, emotional statement :wink: ) murderous thing... and so widespread! What's the sense? Why smoking is legal in contrast to marijuana (this use of 'contrast' isn't quite right, but your meaning is successfully put across. If you say it as a statement, without the "for example" at the end, it may sound fine. eg. "Smoking is legal, which is in contrast to marujuana usgage."
I think this may be the sentence you're looking for- "Why tabacco smoking is legal and marijuana smoking isn't, I'll never understand.")
I think that the first and main cause, (you need a comma here, otherwise the sentence sounds incorrect. And using 'that' in the first part assures that you'll be understood) we can find in (no need of 'the') history. Columbus didn't know anything about harm of tobacco. Nor did the Europeans of his time. Then smoking became a habit and even habit of aristocrasy. Maybe you meant it like this? "Back then, smoking...". Or "As a result, smoking..." The way you have it, it could mean either. Still understandable, though;)
If you had enough money for good cigar, you were a respected person. Afterwards, cigars and cigarettes became cheaper, but the habit remained. And know the word is 'now') we have very many dying people who are proud of their murderous weakness.
I'm sure if ancient Indians smoked marijuana, it would be legal now (I think the word 'now' may distract from the meaning a little).
And at the end of my speech I want to tell about world-wide hypocrisy. All those public actions of tobacco companies, (a comma is needed here) like financing sporting events, are so unnatural and deceitful. (I know you're being expressive here, but because of the length of the sentence, a ! mark becomes inappropriate. You could have "...so unnatural" in the main sentence, then start a new short sentence- "It's so deceitful!". Theat way, the '!' would be fine)
Each company wants to prove that it takes care of its clients and takes part in social life etc. But really... Really, a tobacco company doesn't differ from a drug-plant in northern Afghanistan! It murders people... murders methodically and cynically!
That's all that I have to say. To smoke or not to smoke -- it's your choice. But please don't foget about people around you...
* A note from me. I don't think all the '!' marks are neccessary to put across that you feel strongly about this and that you are angered by it all. But, I do believe it is a personal preference, so I won't say you 'shouldn't' use as many as you did.
It looks a bit messy with all my bold black typing. :lol: But don't worry, all of your setences were understandable. :wink: My explanations just make it look bad. They were almost all just minor mistakes that didn't prevent you from being understood.
:)
