I'll leave it to native English-speakers to write a detailed criticism, but here is what I spotted:
"As far as he new life, it could hardly be a blacksmith"
knew (a mere typo, I know)
"Nevertheless now and there"
Don't you need a comma after nevertheless? And I suspect you wanted to say "now and then", didn't you?
"This was the sound that none of the animals could produce."
I think that "a" would work better here.
You poem is great, and rhymes are good, but the meter in the first line is broken. Don't forget that "mere" is a one-syllable word.
Also, "a thing with what" - sounds wrong to me.
My error-bell rang in some other places too, but I think Pravit and others will make a better job of correcting you than I possibly can.
But a great job nonetheless![]()
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