Quote Originally Posted by Tovarisch View Post
Hi Helenej, your English is great. There are only a few words and letters which I would change to help the paragraph become slightly more natural: Eugene and I have spent a month’s holiday on that island. (Eugene, don't panic, I only said “let’s imagine”). Jackson died on the second day of our stay there. Later we arrived at the airport, caught a bus and went home. I took the mail out of the mail-box. We sat down at the table and I looked through the newspapers as we ate. Then I exclaimed, “Can you imagine? Michael Jackson has died!” Hope this helps
"Eugene and I"... I had always thought that "...and me" sounds cooler.
And all the story in the past tense. Ok.
"Later" instead of my "then". How could I forget such a useful word?
"Caught a bus" instead of "took a bus". Agreed, it sounds more lively.
"Went home" instead of "come home". Uh-oh. Can you see me blushing for this boo-boo?

Thank you, Tovarisch.

So, do you mean that "Michael Jackson has died!” is ok for you?
Inspite of the fact that it occured a month before my saying that?
Actually it was the point of my request.