Thread: Михаил Лермонтов

Originally Posted by kalinka_vinnie

Originally Posted by chaika

Hey, k_v that's good. Let's look at the stress pattern.

Внизу́́́́ глубо́́́́ко подо мно́́́́й
пото́́́́к, уси́́́́ленный грозо́́́́й,
шуме́́́́л.

-'-'---'
-'-'---'
-'

Note no stress on подо - preps. are treated as part of the following word (i.e. as if подомно́́́́й). Trying to keep the meter

And far below me,
strengthened by the storm,
the stream did roar.

I'm not so sure about "clamored". "roar" neither. Do you have another verb?

But this gives us
-'-'-
'---'
-'-'.
Needs a lot of work. Second line needs smth like "made stronger by the storm -'-'-'. Gets it closer to match the first line.

Ok, let's try to make the stress pattern work.

Deep down me beneath,
Powered by the storm,
A stream loudly roared.

How about that?

Sounds real good y'all