Thread: My first translation. After corrections

Good job on the first four lines.

Originally Posted by Katina

Как устало солнце биться
How tired the sun is of being beaten

"биться" doesn't mean "to be beaten". It is either "to fight" or "to beat" (as in "the heart is beating"). The word has other meanings too, but I don't think any of those would apply here

Originally Posted by Katina

А я и не знала, как люблю дождь,
And even I don’t know, how to love the rain

And I didn't even know how much I loved the rain.

Originally Posted by Katina

И имя серое твоё - дождь.
And your name is grey - rain

I may be hairsplitting, but I'd say "Your grey name is rain"

Originally Posted by Katina

Встреч знать бы по часам,
Видеть по рукам, сколько мне дышать,

Gibberish. These lines are ungrammatical, so we can only guess about their precise meaning. My guess is: If I could only know the time of our meeting and divine by hands (?) now much time is left for me to breath. But I wouldn't bet a penny that this is what the lyrics author had in mind.

Originally Posted by Katina

Так раз и навсегда,
Like the first (time) and forever

So, once and for all...

Я и не знала...
And even I don’t know...

"And I didn't even know" (or "I never knew", whichever you like better)

Взгляд прочь бегущих лиц
You don’t look at others running

"A glance of the faces that are running away" or "turned-away glance of running faces". This is not a good English, I know, but it isn't a good Russian either.