Here is what I had in mind at the beginning.

Quote Originally Posted by Ramil
Once upon a time there was a man who xx loved to get into fights. This was very bad for his health, however.

One day he was in the bar xxx talking to a sexy girl but the girl had a boyfriend and the boyfriend attacked him and punched his ugly face. His nose was shattered instantly and he had to go to the hospital for many months for xx to recover.

How is that?
Now your version.

My version:
One day he was in the bar talking to a sexy girl who happenned to have a boyfriend. That boyfriend of hers xxx attacked him by punching his ugly face, shattering his nose instantly. He had to go to the hospital for many months to recover.
Your version is actually better than my original.