Thread: I'm trying to write a fiction book in English. Just for fun :)

Updated (see link). I've tried to fix really everything.

I know that seems like a lot of extra dialogue compared to the original, but I think it's important to "sell" the idea that Peter hasn't yet figured out that he traveled through time. (If the dialogue is too short, it makes at seem as though he's a friend of Dr. Who, and considers time-travel to be completely normal...)