OK. YOU wanted itStyle comments are just my personal (not very humble) opinion, so don't take them very seriously.
I don't think this sounds quite allright. Perhaps, 'they looked totally alien to the trees he was accustomed with back in California'... not the best variant, but here trees are supposed to look like an US statethey looked totally alien to his native California... particularly the ones with white bark stained with horizontal strokes
Anyway, native California is simply wrong (or so I think). I know of course what you were trying to say, but I'm sure the word 'native' cannot be used this way. Try 'home in California' or smth.
Horizontal strokes?
surprisingly? Or it felt otherwise?The weather was surprisingly fresh, even cold. It felt like it was early summer
Memory loss?It didn’t feel like amnesia
Here and further. In Russian fiction I noticet much is said from a neutral point view (it felt like, it appeared, etc), but in English fiction things are more personalized. You find more 'He/she felt like, he/she saw smth appeared, etc).
So, I suggest you write this 'He didn't feel like he'd lost some part of his memory'.
Suggestion: spending time for amusements like ...Peter had been spending time entertaining himself with parties, safari tours and women
Quite unlikely that the Californian girls even know what Euro is.always craving for attention measured in dollars and euroPerhaps just 'money' will do.
Буээээ. Bad, bad, bad cliché.She truly believed that her best friends were diamonds, not people.
a huge house withall thosegreen terracesBut nothing of it made him feel happy not to mention the slowly deteriorating health that didn't promise to be any better in the years to come.But all of it altogether didn’t make him feel happy, topped up by his constantly deteriorating health, which would go worse and worse from year to year.
Without what? Things money could not buy or the money itself?Looking back at his life he realized that therearewere a few things moneycan’tcould not buy. Without them life becomes pointless
Almost everything you say?He tried almost everything – gambling, hunting, fishing, sailing, diving…but nothing brought him the relief he was longing for so much.(if you know what I mean, surely you can invent some more 'exotic' distractions for an old rich fart.
Relief? Satisfaction perhaps?
That's all for now. I'll continue later.