Interesting poem.
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The first thing is this "latter's one's". First "'s", as I think, means a posessive, while the second is a contraction of "is". It is contracted for making a right meter.
Works just the way you want it to. Totally correct.
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Then, in the dream it was "A many-many miles", like in "many a years" construction (or is it "many a year"?), but I desided replace it with "for many-many years".
"Many a mile" sounded good, but "A many-many miles" sounds a wee bit better to me, if you were going for the less modern way of speech.
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The third doubt concerns tenses. What is better, to say in Present tense, and this means that anyone may wander in any time in general sense, or
"You wandered...until you've come"?
Present tense.
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And the last thing. May I keep "really loud" here, or is it too modern, and if I want to make it XIX-century like, they didn't use "really" too much? In the dream it was "very loud".
I think that "very loud" or "quite loud" would be better than "really loud", unless you wanted to keep the same number of syllables, in which case, you would want to use "very loud", heh :wink: . Those two sound less modern, and more 19th century.