Thread: "Я служу России"

hi,
is this translation right.

Не надо забывать солдата
Лучшая награда для него, когда ты
Письма шлёшь с ответом
Сквозь дожди косые
Шлёт слова простые
"Я служу России"

don't forget the soldier
the best award for him is when you
send a letter with an answer
through the slanting rain
he sends simple words
i serve russia

Originally Posted by sperk

hi,
is this translation right.

Yep

Sounds good but I have a couple of minor suggestions.

Maybe it is better to say "pouring rain" since "slanting rain" sounds a bit strange in English.

I would also say "reward" rather than "award".

Originally Posted by sperk

hi,
is this translation right.

Не надо забывать солдата
Лучшая награда для него, когда ты
Письма шлёшь с ответом
Сквозь дожди косые
Шлёт слова простые
"Я служу России"

don't forget the soldier
the best award for him is when you
send a letter with an answer
through the slanting rain
he sends simple words
i serve russia

i serve russia
Structurally, it is correct but maybe " I am serving Russia" is better here? And, don't forget your upper case letters

Originally Posted by shadow1

Sounds good but I have a couple of minor suggestions.

Maybe it is better to say "pouring rain" since "slanting rain" sounds a bit strange in English.

I would also say "reward" rather than "award".

But "award" is more of a military term.

Originally Posted by challenger

Originally Posted by shadow1

Sounds good but I have a couple of minor suggestions.

Maybe it is better to say "pouring rain" since "slanting rain" sounds a bit strange in English.

I would also say "reward" rather than "award".

But "award" is more of a military term.

Yes, but награда here is not a medal or smth. It doesn't relate to his service in military but just a reward in a general sense.

Originally Posted by Ramil

Originally Posted by challenger

Originally Posted by shadow1

Sounds good but I have a couple of minor suggestions.

Maybe it is better to say "pouring rain" since "slanting rain" sounds a bit strange in English.

I would also say "reward" rather than "award".

But "award" is more of a military term.

Yes, but награда here is not a medal or smth. if doesn't related to his service in military but just a reward in a general sense.

Indeed, "reward" is a better term in this context. It represents much more than just an award, a medal, or whatever... It is something like satisfaction...