Океан и три реки

Can someone please check my translation?
Any help would be greatly appreciated. :D

Ocean and Three Rivers

Послушай, это не долго, и беги себе, беги.
Слушаю, слушаю, слушаю жадно,
Не спеша, не дыша и деликатно.
Из неба смело и гордо вытекали три реки.
Неверо-неверо-невероятно,
Круто, но путано и непонятно.

Listen, this is not long, and run yourself, run.
I listen, listen, listen eargerly,
Not hurrying, not breathing and delicately.
From heaven courageous and proud followed three rivers.
Incredible Incredible Incredible,
Suddenly, but confusing and not understandable.

Одна река была как белый день,
Другая чёрная как ночь,
А волны третьей были пламенем,
Но ожидало их одно.

One river was white like day,
Another back as night,
And waves of the third were flames,
But expecting their one.

Вела меня от юга и до севера
Дорога по неведомым краям.
Менялся мир, чего в нём только не было,
А три реки впадали в океан.

Lead me from south and to north
Through unknown edges.
Varied world, which of them only not was
And three rivers ran into the ocean.

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Originally Posted by kwatts59

Can someone please check my translation?
Any help would be greatly appreciated. :D

Ocean and Three Rivers

Послушай, это не долго, и беги себе, беги.
Слушаю, слушаю, слушаю жадно,
Не спеша, не дыша и деликатно.
Из неба смело и гордо вытекали три реки.
Неверо-неверо-невероятно,
Круто, но путано и непонятно.

Listen, this is not long, and run yourself, run.
I listen, listen, listen eargerly,
Not hurrying, not breathing and delicately.
From heaven courageous and proud followed three rivers.
Incredible Incredible Incredible,
Suddenly, but confusing and not understandable.

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seems basically ok, not sure about Беги себе

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Одна река была как белый день,
Другая чёрная как ночь,
А волны третьей были пламенем,
Но ожидало их одно.

One river was white like day,
Another back as night,
And waves of the third were flames,
But expecting their one.

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last line should be "the same fate awaited each of them"

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Вела меня от юга и до севера
Дорога по неведомым краям.
Менялся мир, чего в нём только не было,
А три реки впадали в океан.

Lead me from south and to north
Through unknown edges.
Varied world, which of them only not was
And three rivers ran into the ocean.

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the road led me from south to north,
through unknown parts (regions),
the world kept changing; I saw all kinds of things
and the three rivers flowed into the ocean

"Круто" is slang.
It may be translated here as "cool".

Но ожидало их одно.
But same destiny awaited them.[/url]

I don't understand. The word destiny/fate (судьба) is not in the following sentence.

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Originally Posted by Frequent_Guest

Но ожидало их одно.
But same destiny awaited them.

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Is it implied by the word ожидало (awaited)?
Does "Но судьба ожидало их одно" mean the same thing?

Is this right?
беги себе, беги
run yourself, run

This also I cannot understand?

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Originally Posted by begemot

Менялся мир, чего в нём только не было,
the world kept changing; I saw all kinds of things

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Wow what a coincidence! I just posted about this song in response to Niamh in the other thread :o

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Originally Posted by kwatts59

I don't understand. The word destiny/fate (судьба) is not in the following sentence.

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Originally Posted by Frequent_Guest

Но ожидало их одно.
But same destiny awaited them.

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Is it implied by the word ожидало (awaited)?
Does "Но судьба ожидало их одно" mean the same thing?

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well, literally I guess you would just say "the same thing awaited them" or "they would could to the same thing" --but that sounds flat in English, not appropriate to a song like this. Gramatically, судьба ожидало их одно is impossible, because судьба is feminine.--it would have to be судьба ожидала их одна. Одно is the subject here.


Is this right?
беги себе, беги
run yourself, run

I'm not sure about that either.

This also I cannot understand?

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Originally Posted by begemot

Менялся мир, чего в нём только не было,
the world kept changing; I saw all kinds of things

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мир менялся -- a reflective, imperfective verb. The change was a process, an ongoing thing.

чего в нём только не было=can't put this construction directly into English withuout having it sound strange. It's like "it had just about everything in it". В нём refers back to мир.

"беги себе, беги" is impossible to translate literally I guess.
It just means "run wherever you like".