Алла Пугачева - Белый снег

Can anyone check my translation please?
All help would be greatly appreciated as always.

Алла Пугачева - Белый снег
Alla Pugacheva - White snow

Плачет метель
По другому все теперь
Зимних дней акварель
И пустынный белый пляж
Летний праздник наш
Ты у моря спрячь
И не плачь о нем, не плачь
Любовь на Земле лишь мираж

The blizzard cries
on another all now
winter days are a water-color
and a deserted white beach
our summer holiday
you hide at the sea
and do not cry about it, do not cry
Love on the earth is only a mirage


Белый снег
Стрелок бег
Одинокий век
Есть ли любовь, скажи ?
Все миражи
И на восход
Белый пароход
В море уйдет
И все пройдет

The white snow
of arrows run
the lonely times (period, century?)
whether there is love, tell (us)?
all are mirages
and the rising
white steamship
in the sea will leave
and all will pass

Капельку жаль
Прошлогоднюю печаль
До свидания, февраль
Тянет к новым берегам
Веря небесам
Снова будем ждать
Счастья на пути искать
Поверив опять миражам

the droplet is a pity
last year's grief
good-bye, February
pulls to a new coast
trusting heavens (skies?)
again we will wait
to search for happiness on the way
having believed again in mirages

И этот снег шутя с собой принес
Лишь снежинки из застывших слез
Обмани меня в последний раз
Обмани меня хотя б на час

and this snow joking with itself has brought
only snowflakes from the stiffened tears
deceive me for the last time
deceive me at least an hour

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все По другому
on another all now

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Everything is diffrent.

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И не плачь о нем, не плачь
and do not cry about it

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About what? Looks like She's lost her love and she's crying about that. In which case should be "Don't cry over him".

век = A century

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Тянет к новым берегам
pulls to a new coast

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Check that dative ending! ам is plural :wink: .

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Обмани меня хотя б на час
deceive me at least an hour

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на час = For an hour. На anything = for that amount of time. На месяц - for a month, and so on.

KwattsNot bad. I didnt go through the whole thing, but im not an expert either so its not incredibly important what i say. I just wanted mention that, translating songs probably helps your vocabulary, which is a good thing, but something which is hinders is, well, not really your 'imagination', but comprehension almost. The more you relate english and russian back and fourth to each other, the less natural you will sound. It might be wise to start just reading things only in russian, and keeping them that way, so your brain gets used to thinking and processing sentences/thoughts/feelings entirely in russian.

it hinders the english part a little bit too, when you say things like "The man dog walking his the park through" (not that you would do something, but you know what i am saying). It's like. C'mon, that's not even right, so why leave it like that?

All i am saying is try leave the russian in russian a little more, and you'll be suprised, i think, at the amount of new vocab you learn without even having to look words up.

Thank you very much for your help and your suggestions.
I love Russian music very much but I am not only translating the songs for myself. I have a friend who wants to post song lyrics on her website.

Before I tackle a translation, I listen to the music several times to get a feel for the song. I try to figure out the meaning first, then I translate. I do not know if this is the best way to learn Russian but it appears to help me a lot. Hopefully I will be fluent in a few more months.

Anyways, what does this mean?
Белый снег Стрелок бег
White snow of arrows/pointers run

Белый снег and Стрелок бег are not related to each other. It's just an enumeration.
Стрелок бег is literally "The run of clock hands", perhaps it means "fast run of the time".

The snowstorm weeps
Everything is not the same now
The water-color of winter days
And the deserted white beach
Hide by the sea
Our summer holiday
And don't cry about it, don't cry
Love on earth is just a mirage

White snow
The run of clock hands
The lonely age
Tell (me) if love exists
Everything is a mirage
And towards the sunrise
The steamship will sail
To the sea
And everything will pass

There's a bit of regret
For the last year's sorrow
Goodbye, February
I feel attraction to new coasts
Trusting heavens
We will wait again
We will seek happiness on our way again
Trusting mirages again

And this snow has jokingly (or may be easily) brought
Just snowflakes of frozen tears
Deceive me for the last time
Deceive me at least for an hour

Please excuse my English, I've only had experience with technical documentation and communication in it. :oops:

Ah! It seems to make more sense now.
Is this right?

Белый снег
Стрелок бег
Одинокий век
Есть ли любовь, скажи ?
Все миражи

The white snow,
the run of the clock hands,
the lonely century,
whether there is love, tell (us)?
All is a mirage

Also what is
Веря небесам
Trusting heavens/skies

I am always having difficulty with небе.
I can never tell whether it means sky or heaven,
and in this case there is very little context in this song.

Other words that are sometimes confusing:
мир - world or peace
свет - light but sometimes earth
дорога - road
дорого - dear
другой - other
друга - friend
друг-друга - each other

Небо is the blue dome above your head.
Небеса (note that it is always plural) is the place where angels live.
However these two words are sometimes used as synonyms (you should realize the meaning from context).

Is it awkward to use небеса as opposed to небе when referring to the blue dome over our heads?
Небеса обратять серый.
The skies turn grey.

Or do we have to use the singular небе when refering to the blue dome over our heads?
Небе обратит серый.
The sky turns grey. (basically the same meaning)

Небеса станут серыми or Небо станет серым. The English "to turn" here means "to get, to became" and this is Russian "стать". Or you may use the verb "посереть" - "to get/became gray" :) Небеса посереют, небо посереет.
"Обратиться" in this sence may be used in cases like "He turned a wolf" "Он обратился волком", otherwise it is "to address, to apply".

As for the difference in meaning, Небеса is indeed more often the place where angels live rather than simply "blue sky", but Небо is both, I think. The word is a word as such, with all its meanings, and all they may become important, especially in poetry. There is no one-to-one correspondence not only between the words but also between the conceptions (world view) in different languages. That's what makes them interesting to study.