Please, can anyone help me to correct the text in English?

I need your help to correct the text. It doesn't matter you are a native speaker or Russian learner. I need someone to read my text and check it, find any mistakes (grammatical, lexical, or in style). May be someone have any idea to add something interesting according to the style of the text, any phrases or so.

Please, is there anyone online to help me right now with the e-mail? ( I can't to write the story here, because it's a competitive work) .:search:

Oh, that's nice, 15 views and no comment.....

my telepathy's a little off today...it may help if you actually presented the text you need help with.

PM me and I'll try to help.